Describe a plan you had to change

Band 6

I would like to talk about a plan I have to changeErro de tempo verbal: deveria ser “had to change” last April, a picnic by the Charvak reservoir on Saturday with six classmates from my course. We organiseErro de tempo verbal: deveria ser “had been organising” it for two weeks and everybody had a job, and I was in charge of the wayPalavra imprecisa: “route” é mais preciso and the transport. We agreed to leave at eight in the morning. But on Friday night the forecast sayErro de tempo verbal: deveria ser “forecast said” heavy rain for all weekend, and the road to the lake is very muddy, so we knew the plan was not goodFormulação básica; limita o Lexical Resource. We wrote many messages, and then we decideErro de tempo verbal: deveria ser “decided” not to cancel and to go to my friend Timur’s house, which has a big living room. We took the food that we prepared, and Timur’s mother gave us two board games. HonestlyMarcador discursivo natural que introduz um comentário pessoal, I was disappointed first, because I worked hard for this plan and I wanted the lake, but at the end I enjoyed it more, because we played to late evening and nobody was afraid about the road. I learned that a good day is about people and not about the place.

Band 7

I’d like to talk about a plan I had to change last April: a Saturday picnic by the Charvak reservoir with six classmates from my course. We’d been organising it for a fortnight, everyone had a job, I was in charge of the route and transport, and we’d agreed to leave at eight in the morning. But on Friday night the forecast changed to heavy rain for the whole weekend, and the road to the lake can getsErro de forma verbal: deveria ser “can get” very muddy, so it quickly became clear that the original plan had fallen throughPhrasal verb natural para um plano que não dá certo. After a lot of messages, we decided to move everything to my friend Timur’s house, which has a big living room, instead of calling the whole day off”Instead of” com gerúndio usado corretamente. We brought the food we’d already prepared, and Timur’s mother lent us two board games. In the end, I enjoyed it more than I’d expectedMarcador discursivo reflexivo que responde à parte do “explique”: we played until late and nobody had to worry about getting home in the dark. I was disappointed at first, but it taught me that a good day depends on the people more than the place.

Band 8

I’d like to talk about a plan I had to change last April: a Saturday picnic by the Charvak reservoir with six classmates from my course. We’d been organising it for a fortnight, everyone had a job, I was in charge of the route and transport, and we’d agreed to leave at eight in the morning. But on Friday night the forecast changed to heavy rain for the whole weekend, and the road to the lake can get very muddy, so it quickly became clear that the original plan wasn’t sensible. After a lot of messages, we decided that, instead of calling it off, we’d move everything to my friend Timur’s house, which has a big living room. We brought the food we’d already prepared, and Timur’s mother lent us two board games. In the end, I enjoyed it more than I’d expectedMarcador discursivo reflexivo que responde à parte do “explique”: we played until late, nobody had to worry about getting home before dark, and we talked more than we would have outdoorsElipse condicional usada com naturalidade. I was disappointed at first, but it taught me that a good day depends on the people far more than on the place.