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Band 6

Nowadays, more and more people in the cities cycle to work or to school. This is an interesting topic and many people have a different opinion. In this essay I will explain why this is happening and I will say if it is a positive or a negative development.

FirstlyFirstly와 Secondly가 본론 문단 사이의 유일한 연결 표현, there are many reasons why people cycle. The main reason is that the traffic is very bad in cities. When people drive a car in the morning, they must wait a long time and this is a big problem for the workers, but a bicycle can go between the cars. Also the government build주어와 동사의 수 불일치: 올바른 형태는 “builds” cycle lanes and this is good for the people이유를 언급만 하고 설명하지 않음, 자전거 도로가 이동을 어떻게 바꾸는지 설명이 없음. Another reason is that many people see cycling as a modern and active way of life, and they like to tell their friends about it. When the weather is good, the streets are full of bicycles, and this makes other people want to try.

Secondly, I think this is a positive development. People who cycle every day are more healthy비교급 형태 오류: 올바른 형태는 “healthier” because they make exercise동사 오류: 올바른 형태는 “get exercise”. The air is also better when there are fewer cars. I think this is very important for the cities and for the people who live there. But the roads are dangerus철자 오류: 올바른 형태는 “dangerous” for cyclists, especially with big lorries, and some people are hurt.

In conclusion결론 문단임을 알리는 유일한 신호, 이어서 두 답을 하나로 뭉뚱그림, people cycle because of the traffic and the lanes, and it is positive and negative at the same time. I hope that the cities will think about this question in the future. It has advantages and disadvantages, so I think it depends on the city얼버무린 마무리, 긍정인지 부정인지 묻는 질문의 분명한 답이 사라짐.

Band 7

More people in cities now choose to cycle to work or school. Cycling is no longer only a hobby, and the change is visible on many streets. This essay will explain the main reason for this trend and argue that it is a positive development, provided that cities make cycling safe서론에서 두 부분에 모두 답하고 판단과 그 조건을 밝힘.

The main reason is that cycling has become the quicker option for short journeys. As traffic grows, cars move slowly at rush hour, whereas a bicycle can pass through the same streets without waiting. Time that is saved in this way can be spent at home or at work. In addition상황에 맞는 단순한 추가 표현, 문단이 하나의 주제를 유지함, many cities have built cycle lanes in recent years, so a journey of a few kilometres that once felt dangerous now feels manageable. A commuter who sits in a queue of cars for twenty minutes can often cover a same distance관사 오류: 올바른 형태는 “the same distance” by bike in about the same time.

I believe this is a positive development, for two reasons. People who cycle daily get exercise without setting aside time for it자연스러운 콜로케이션, 문장이 구체적인 내용을 말함, and fewer cars mean cleaner air in streets where children walk to school. Cyclists also arrive awake and ready to work, which benefits their employers and teachers. The main drawback is safety, since riders who share narrow roads with lorries are at risk단점을 이유와 함께 밝혀 판단이 균형을 이룸.

Although this risk is real, it is a reason for protected lanes and not a reason to discourage cycling양보절로 문장을 열고 정확하게 사용. Cities that separate bicycles from heavy traffic keep the benefits and remove most of the danger. Painted lanes alone are not enough, because cars can still park in them. In conclusion어울리지만 신호로는 약간 과하게 쓰임, people cycle because it is quicker, and the change is positive if safety is built in.

Band 8

The rise in commuting by bicycle has an easily stated cause and a more qualified verdict. The two halves are connected: the reason people ride is also the reason the risk to them matters. I will argue that cycling has become the sensible choice for short urban journeys, and that the change is positive wherever cities protect the people who ride한 문장으로 두 부분에 모두 답하고 두 번째 답의 조건을 밝힘.

The cause lies in the logic of congestion. At rush hour a car in a city centre moves at the speed of the traffic around it, whereas a bicycle moves at the speed of its rider, and over a few kilometres the two often arrive together병렬 구조로 균형 잡힌 대조, 전체적으로 정확함. Cycle lanes tilt the comparison further, because they make the journey safer as well as quicker, and a commuter who has noticed this rarely goes back to the queue. The saving is modest on any one day, but it is the predictability of the journey that people value.

The consequences are largely beneficial. A commuter who cycles gains exercise without giving up time for it정확하고 간결하며 군더더기가 없음, and every journey that leaves a car at home reduces the pollution in streets that others must breathe. These gains reach beyond the rider: quieter streets are easier to cross, and children walk to school among fewer exhaust fumes. The one serious drawback is safety: where riders share narrow roads with lorries, a minor error becomes a serious injury정확하고 쉬운 표현, 문장이 무슨 일이 일어나는지 말함.

That risk, however, argues for better design, not for fewer cyclists하나의 분명한 대상을 다시 가리키고, 공식 없이 문단의 방향을 돌림. Cities that separate bicycles from heavy traffic keep the benefits and remove most of the danger, which is why I judge the change positive on one condition: that the lanes are built for the riders who will use them결론을 얼버무리지 않고 조건과 함께 매듭지음.