Describe a successful business person you know

Band 6

I would like to talk about my uncle Rustam, who is my mother’s brother and ownНеузгодженість підмета й присудка: має бути «owns» a bakery business in Tashkent. About twelve years ago he started with only one small shop, and he worked in it himself from five in the morning. I used to help him in the school holidays, so I knowПомилка в часі: має бути «knew» how hard the work was. Now he has four shops and about thirty workers, which is a very big successПростий словниковий запас; обмежує Lexical Resource for a person who haveПомилка в часі: має бути «had» no experience in business. I think he is successful because he is very patient. He did not open new shops quickly, he waited until the first shop was working well. He also listenПомилка в часі: має бути «listens» to his customers, and when they said the bread was too heavy, he changeПомилка в часі: має бути «changed» the recipe. Another reason is that he teaches his workers carefully and he is kind to them, so they stay with him for many years. When I see him I think that success is not only luck, it is also about hard work every day and being honest to people.

Band 7

I’d like to talk about my uncle Rustam, my mother’s brother, who owns a bakery business in Tashkent. About twelve years ago he began with a single small shop, and he worked in it himself from five every morning. I used to help him during the school holidays, so I knew exactly how demanding it wasЗсув часу назад зберігає узгодженість часів. Today he has four shops and around thirty employees, which is quite an achievement for someone who started from scratchПриродний ідіоматичний вислів with no business background. I think he’s successful because he’s patient: he didn’t open new shops in a rush, he waited until the first one was running smoothly. He also pays attention to his customers, and when several of them said the bread was too heavy, he changed the recipe within a week. Another reason is that he trains his staff carefully and treats them kindly, so they tend to stay with him for yearsЧіткий зв’язок із результатом робить думку логічною. Watching him made me realise that success isn’t just luck; it comes from work hardПомилка у формі слова: має бути «working hard» every day and being honest with people, a lesson I’d like to remember in my own career.

Band 8

I’d like to talk about my uncle Rustam, my mother’s brother, who owns a bakery business in Tashkent. About twelve years ago he began with a single small shop, which he ran single-handedly from five every morningТочна, природна колокація. I used to help him during school holidays, so I knew exactly how demanding it was. Today he has four shops and around thirty employees, quite an achievement for someone who started from scratch with no business background. I think he’s successful chiefly because he’s patient: he never opened a new shop in a rush, but waited until the previous one was running smoothly. He also pays close attention to customers; when several mentioned that the bread felt heavy, he changed the recipe within a week. Beyond that, he trains his staff carefully and treats them kindly, which is why many of them have stayed for years. Watching him taught me that success isn’t simply a matter of luckУсталений зворот природно вжито в заперечному порівнянні but the result of working hard every day and dealing honestly with people, and that is exactly the lesson I’d like to carry into my own career.