Describe a happy event you organised

Band 6

I would like to talk about a surprise birthday party that I organiseErro de tempo verbal: deveria ser “organised” for my grandmother last August. She was turning seventy, and my cousins and I wanted to do something special for her. We held it in the garden of my uncle’s house, in the evening, because the weather was cooler. First, I wrote a long list of guestsFormulação básica; limita o Lexical Resource with my mother, and my cousins helpErro de tempo verbal: deveria ser “helped” me with the food and the decorations. The most difficult part was keeping it secret, because my grandmother always askErro de concordância verbal: deveria ser “asks” questions when she sees us whispering. We told her that we were just having a family dinner. My sister and I also put lights and paper flowers in the garden the afternoon before. On the day the cake arrived late, and I was a little nervous, but my uncle goErro de tempo verbal: deveria ser “went” to collect it and it arrived before she did. When she came into the garden, everyone shouted “surprise” and she started to cry from happiness. Afterwards we sat together and looked at old photographs until midnight. I felt very proud and happy, and I think it was one of the best evenings of the year for my family.

Band 7

I’d like to talk about a surprise birthday party I organised for my grandmother last August. She was turning seventy, and my cousins and I wanted to do something special for her. We held it in the garden of my uncle’s house in the evening, when it was cooler. First I drew up a guest list with my motherPhrasal verb usado com naturalidade no simple past, and my cousins took care of the food and decorationsCollocation precisa. The hardest part was keeping it a secret, because my grandmother always asks questions when she sees us whispering, so we told her it was just a family dinner. My sister and I also hung lights and paper flowers around the garden the afternoon before. On the day, the cake arrived late and I started to panic, but my uncle went to collect it and it got there before she did. When she walked into the garden, everyone shouted “surprise” and she burst into tears of happiness. Afterwards we sat together and looked through old photographs until midnight. Looking back, what I felt most was relief and prideA expressão de sinalização introduz a reflexão que a pergunta pede, because it have broughtErro de forma do tempo verbal: deveria ser “because it had brought” the whole family together.

Band 8

I’d like to talk about a surprise birthday party I organised for my grandmother last August. She was turning seventy, and my cousins and I wanted to do something special for her. We held it in the garden of my uncle’s house in the evening, when it was cooler. First I drew up a guest list with my mother, and my cousins took care of the food and decorations. The hardest part was keeping it a secret, since my grandmother always asks questions when she catches us whispering, so we told her it was just a family dinner. My sister and I also hung lights and paper flowers around the garden the afternoon before. On the day, the cake arrived late and I started to panic, but my uncle went to collect it and it got there before she did. No sooner had she walked into the garden than everyone shouted “surprise”Estrutura invertida que dá ênfase ao momento principal, and she burst into tears of happiness. Afterwards we sat together and looked through old photographs until midnight. Looking back, what I felt most was relief and pride, because it had brought the whole family togetherCollocation natural que dá o motivo final in a way that nothing else that year had.